tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post3478149474910242558..comments2011-11-04T14:49:06.420-07:00Comments on Fan Fiction 2011/2 group 6: fan fiction draftFrankhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07106448824633699950noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-49508737860694006512011-08-18T16:38:48.199-07:002011-08-18T16:38:48.199-07:00In saying to fix the grammer though, the mistakes ...In saying to fix the grammer though, the mistakes and grammer add a lot to the humour, especially since it is originally a Japanese cartoon.Hassanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18355803201329768229noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-4674784921446500102011-08-18T16:35:29.079-07:002011-08-18T16:35:29.079-07:00I love how you are taking a children's program...I love how you are taking a children's program and turning it into something so r18+! Keep up the good work, just fix up the of the grammer errors and spelling before the final product!Hassanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18355803201329768229noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-33148025596285823912011-08-06T15:41:26.436-07:002011-08-06T15:41:26.436-07:00Sounds good so far. Some parts were quite short, a...Sounds good so far. Some parts were quite short, and the beginning was a bit confusing. Although you are getting somewhere into the story. Like what Simon said, there are some spelling mistakes that you would have to correct for your final one. Have fun writing the ending!Beleanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14650890061048321522noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-49010357741643347432011-08-05T21:06:52.877-07:002011-08-05T21:06:52.877-07:00I liked the story, I wanted to keep on reading mor...I liked the story, I wanted to keep on reading more. But are you writing the story as if it was in the past or in present? That got me a bit confused. <br />I like Simon's idea about the pictures, because I'm not very familiar with Pokemon I just know how Picachu looks like and Ash and all of them, but don't know about the other Pokemons!<br />Keep it up!Nadinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12125840045982886197noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-62728027351183965962011-08-02T21:23:42.012-07:002011-08-02T21:23:42.012-07:00Hey hun! Is your fanfic suppose to be a comedy?
I...Hey hun! Is your fanfic suppose to be a comedy? <br />If so i definitely found it funny! Love Pikachus journey so far, but then again i also agree with Simon.<br />If you can proof read your draft and fix a few errors it'll be great and maybe watch your tense like is it past or present you know etc.. I find you have too many short sentences after eachother maybe space them out abit also!<br />Anyways goodluck with the final looking forward to reading it! great start so far miss! :)Luseane Tupouniuahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15912447314390455191noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-32629762480077537772011-08-02T21:13:44.384-07:002011-08-02T21:13:44.384-07:00Hi, just a quick comment so you can improve on the...Hi, just a quick comment so you can improve on the fan fiction. You got a spelling on "throwing up" and I'm not that sure when you write "Picachu decided trued to do tequila shots." Well it's Pikachu anyway.<br /><br />Moreover, you can hit double enter to get the paragraphs separated for easier reading. And as not everyone know about Pokemon, you can have a bit of the synopsis of the original piece and an image each time you introduce to the story so it'll be more interesting that way. =DSimon Nguyenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12917587272756146401noreply@blogger.com