tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post6335543680305496428..comments2011-11-04T14:49:06.420-07:00Comments on Fan Fiction 2011/2 group 6: Simon's Fan Fiction DraftFrankhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07106448824633699950noreply@blogger.comBlogger12125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-18198724290514872992011-08-16T19:37:07.092-07:002011-08-16T19:37:07.092-07:00I like how even tho its a written piece and not an...I like how even tho its a written piece and not an anime comic..the images your writing style, spacing, use of bold onamatopia create the image of a graphic novel in my head. My imagination of the piece is visually set out like a comic.FloydLeehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/03610491203407703664noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-58261465185677795962011-08-09T21:05:14.928-07:002011-08-09T21:05:14.928-07:00Thanks Luseane, I doubt there will be anymore. I&#...Thanks Luseane, I doubt there will be anymore. I'm at the limit of word count now. I thought I did somehow end the day leaving the imagination to continue though :P Can you point the minors that I need to fix? I looked them all over but can't see any @_@Simon Nguyenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12917587272756146401noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-38738032394323043442011-08-09T20:49:44.645-07:002011-08-09T20:49:44.645-07:00Hey Simon! great start to your fanfic! i'm not...Hey Simon! great start to your fanfic! i'm not really a fan of Anime so i wasn't too sure if i was going to understand it but i did thanks to your synopsis! Only thing i had trouble with was keeping up with the characters! Maybe if i watch the clip i'll get a better idea. Your grammar and sentences seem to ALLGOOD! except for some minors ones that won't take long to fix. Other than looking forward to reading your final! Great job so far! :)Luseane Tupouniuahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15912447314390455191noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-13293255989922166922011-08-08T02:15:17.531-07:002011-08-08T02:15:17.531-07:00it's only a expression common in manga and ani...it's only a expression common in manga and anime which express something awkward, no sweat on it.Simon Nguyenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12917587272756146401noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-85722127026934194032011-08-06T22:25:06.982-07:002011-08-06T22:25:06.982-07:00I don't know much about grammar really, but I ...I don't know much about grammar really, but I found some things like ueah that i can't really imagine the sound!!Nadinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12125840045982886197noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-31338603875357126472011-08-06T21:45:52.251-07:002011-08-06T21:45:52.251-07:00Okay, I put apart the synopsis from the opening of...Okay, I put apart the synopsis from the opening of the fanfic. Hope it can make sense somehow. I was worried of how you would lost track of following the character somehow but if I make it obvious it becomes boring as everything is repeated like a cycle.Simon Nguyenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12917587272756146401noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-88900656677106905572011-08-06T16:41:14.817-07:002011-08-06T16:41:14.817-07:00Oh! and some of the sentences in the synopsis does...Oh! and some of the sentences in the synopsis doesn't make sense to me. . . .Beleanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14650890061048321522noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-32650355134756210992011-08-06T16:38:50.228-07:002011-08-06T16:38:50.228-07:00I like how you wrote a synopsis at the beginning s...I like how you wrote a synopsis at the beginning so I know who the characters are in your story. What frank said, an interesting dialogue however I sort of follow who is talking. But sometimes not. Its funny anyway. Keep going! I want to know what happens to Ojousama. :PBeleanahttps://www.blogger.com/profile/14650890061048321522noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-21799996787608551172011-08-05T23:09:30.466-07:002011-08-05T23:09:30.466-07:00Okay I'll make sure they're there in the f...Okay I'll make sure they're there in the final post. Is my grammar and stuffs alright?Simon Nguyenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12917587272756146401noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-46966024011503825992011-08-05T21:23:03.458-07:002011-08-05T21:23:03.458-07:00I liked the story.
I also liked that you put some ...I liked the story.<br />I also liked that you put some pictures up, so that we know what the characters looked like.<br />I also liked how you described the actions.<br />Good work!Nadinehttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12125840045982886197noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-17018049030373441942011-08-05T02:56:48.996-07:002011-08-05T02:56:48.996-07:00Thanks, I thought I should try to see if it's ...Thanks, I thought I should try to see if it's easy for everyone to read as I let them imagine of the characters' expression. It's more interesting that way, well at least to my hope. I'll improve it later on in my final as people commenting on this.Simon Nguyenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/12917587272756146401noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-888155536200625525.post-27024242626673817132011-08-02T21:17:34.109-07:002011-08-02T21:17:34.109-07:00very interesting technique with the dialogue.very interesting technique with the dialogue.Frankhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07106448824633699950noreply@blogger.com